last corrections. To the reviewers!

Author: 70rc

content/thesis_dune-nd.tex

@@ -141,9 +141,9 @@ \section{Preliminary \AC{} \glsentrylong{nd} Design}
 	\centering
 	\includegraphics[width=\textwidth]{ac/dune_nd/Assembly_ND-1}
 	\caption[\AC{} \glsentryshort{dune} \glsentryshort{nd} engineering drawing]{%
-		Preliminary engineering drawing of the \acrshort{dune} \acrshort{nd} \AC{} component.
+		Preliminary engineering drawing of \AC{} in the \acrshort{dune} \acrshort{nd}.
 		\num{4 x 5} modules with the longer dimension in beam direction.
-		Service volumes make up the remainder of the \SI{5 x 5}{\metre} \acrshort{lar} bath.
+		Service volumes make up the remainder of the \SI{5 x 5}{\metre} \acrshort{lar} bath contained within a low-radiation-length foam-insulated membrane cryostat.
 	}
 	\label{fig:dune-nd_ac}
 \end{figure}
@@ -153,7 +153,7 @@ \section{Preliminary \AC{} \glsentrylong{nd} Design}
 The \larpix{} electronics described in Section~\ref{sec:studies_pixel-electronics} are designed to be capable of handling the data rates and power consumption expected for a \SI{3}{\milli\metre} pixel pitch \AC{} \gls{nd} component.
 Therefore, a sufficient spatial resolution from a physics point of view is provided while keeping the power and data rate demands on the readout electronics under control.
 
-Inspired by the design of the \dune{} \SI{35}{\tonne} prototype at \gls{fail}~\cite{dune4} the \lar{} bath is held in a foam-insulated membrane cryostat.
+Inspired by the design of the \dune{} \SI{35}{\tonne} prototype at \gls{fail}~\cite{dune4} the \lar{} bath is contained within a foam-insulated membrane cryostat.
 The outer support structure is a \SI{0.3}{\metre} thick steel-reinforced concrete layer, followed by a \SI{0.4}{\metre} thick polyurethane foam layer for thermal insulation.
 Inside of this is a \SI{2}{\milli\metre} thick stainless steel membrane sealing the \lar{} bath from the environment.
 There are several other support layers, all of which with a thickness of $\sim{\SI{1}{\milli\metre}}$, with a more detailed description in~\cite{dune4}.