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doc/manual/source/release-notes-determinate/changes.md

@@ -177,16 +177,15 @@ This section lists the differences between upstream Nix 2.33 and Determinate Nix
 
 <!-- Determinate Nix version 3.16.1 -->
 
-* Upstream C store API improvements by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#352](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/352)
 
-* Record provenance for unlocked inputs and impure evaluations by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#354](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/354)
+* Record provenance for unlocked inputs and impure evaluations in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#354](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/354)
 
-* Add setting narinfo-cache-meta-ttl by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#355](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/355)
+* Add setting narinfo-cache-meta-ttl in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#355](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/355)
 
-* Add derivationWithMeta builtin by @RossComputerGuy in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#357](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/357)
+* Add derivationWithMeta builtin in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#357](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/357)
 
-* Add builtins.wasi by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#359](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/359)
+* Add builtins.wasi in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#359](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/359)
 
-* Add `nix provenance verify` command by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#356](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/356)
+* Add `nix provenance verify` command in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#356](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/356)
 
-* builtins.hashString: Devirtualize lazy paths, and re-enable lazy trees tests by @edolstra in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#360](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/360)
+* builtins.hashString: Devirtualize lazy paths, and re-enable lazy trees tests in [DeterminateSystems/nix-src#360](https://github.com/DeterminateSystems/nix-src/pull/360)