Update data-box-disk-deploy-picked-up.md

Author: ansubram

articles/databox/data-box-disk-deploy-picked-up.md

@@ -156,20 +156,20 @@ If needed, you can contact Quantium Solution Support (Japanese language) at the
 
 ### [In Self-Managed](#tab/in-selfmanaged)
 
-Customers using Data Box Disk in Japan, Singapore, Korea and West Europe who have selected the self-managed shipping option to use their own shipping during order creation should follow the instructions below. 
+If you are using Data Box Disk in Japan, Singapore, Korea, and West Europe and have selected the self-managed shipping option during order creation, follow these instructions. 
 
-1. Go to the Overview blade for your order in the Azure portal and go through the instructions displayed when you click Schedule pickup. You should see an Authorization code that will be used at the time of dropping off the order.
+1. Go to the **Overview** blade for your order in the Azure portal. Go through the instructions displayed when you select **Schedule pickup**. You should see an Authorization code that is used at the time of dropping off the order.
 
-2. Send an email to the Azure Data Box Operations team using the below template when you are ready to return the device.
+2. Send an email to the Azure Data Box Operations team using the following template when you are ready to return the device.
 
     ```
     To: [email protected]
     Subject: Request for Azure Data Box Disk drop-off for order: ‘orderName’
     Body: 
      a. Order name
-     b. Contact name of the person coming for drop off (this will be validated with a Govt approved id that you need to carry during drop off)
+     b. Contact name of the person dropping off. You will need to display a Government approved ID during the drop off.
     ```
-3. Microsoft Operations team will work with you to arrange the drop-off to the Azure Datacenter.
+3. Azure Data Box Operations team will work with you to arrange the drop-off to the Azure Datacenter.
 
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