update example descriptions

Author: EdB-MSFT

articles/sentinel/enroll-simplified-pricing-tier.md

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 **Example 1:** A dedicated cluster ingesting *more* data than the Commitment tier level, but under the next highest tier (ideal).
 :::image type="content" source="media/enroll-simplified-pricing-tier/example-1.png" alt-text="Spreadsheet showing Commitment tier over usage billing example for a Microsoft Sentinel workspace in a dedicated cluster." lightbox="media/enroll-simplified-pricing-tier/example-1.png":::  
 
-The table shows two scenarios where the three-workspace dedicated cluster is ideally ingesting more data than the 5,000 GB per day commitment tier. The first scenario uses cluster billing mode, the second uses workspace billing mode. In both scenarios, the first two workspaces, labeled A and B, aren't Microsoft Sentinel enabled. Workspace A ingested 1 TB of data, while workspace B ingested 2 TB of data. In cluster billing mode, the combined 3 TB of Log Analytics usage is billed to the cluster resource. The Commitment tier detail shows the price equals to 3 TB multiplied by the Log Analytics effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.6 units of the commitment tier per day rate. Workspace C is a Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace that ingested 3 TB of data. Its commitment tier detail shows the price equals 3 TB multiplied by the Microsoft Sentinel effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.6 units of the commitment tier per day rate. In workspace billing mode, the primary difference is that each portion of the ingested data is billed to the individual workspaces, but the grand total is the same (1.2 times the per day rate).
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+The table shows two scenarios where the three-workspace dedicated cluster is ingesting more data than the 5,000 GB per day commitment tier. In both scenarios, the first two workspaces, labeled A and B, aren't Microsoft Sentinel enabled. Workspace A ingested 1 TB of data, while workspace B ingested 2 TB of data. Workspace C is a Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace that ingested 3 TB of data.  
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+The first scenario uses cluster billing mode, The second uses workspace billing mode.  
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+In cluster billing mode, the combined 3 TB of Log Analytics usage is billed to the cluster resource. The Commitment tier detail shows the price equals to 3 TB multiplied by the Log Analytics effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.6 units of the commitment tier per day rate. Workspace C is a Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace that ingested 3 TB of data. Its commitment tier detail shows the price equals 3 TB multiplied by the Microsoft Sentinel effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.6 units of the commitment tier per day rate.
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+In workspace billing mode, each portion of the ingested data is billed to the individual workspaces. The total is the same as for cluster billing - 1.2 units of the commitment tier per day rate.
 
 **Example 2:** A dedicated cluster ingesting *less* data than the Commitment tier level. Consider adding more workspaces to the cluster.
 :::image type="content" source="media/enroll-simplified-pricing-tier/example-2.png" alt-text="Spreadsheet showing Commitment tier under usage billing example for a Microsoft Sentinel workspace in a dedicated cluster." lightbox="media/enroll-simplified-pricing-tier/example-2.png":::  
 
-The table shows two scenarios where the three-workspace dedicated cluster is ingesting less data than the 5,000 GB per day commitment tier. The first scenario uses cluster billing mode, the second uses workspace billing mode. In both scenarios, the first two workspaces, labeled A and B, aren't Microsoft Sentinel enabled. Workspace A and B ingested 1 TB of data separately, while the Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace C ingested 2 TB of data (a total of 4 TB). Since the commitment tier is 5TB, there's 1 TB of unused ingestion to account for. In cluster billing mode, the combined 2 TB of Log Analytics usage adds the extra 1 TB of unused usage and is billed to the cluster resource. The Commitment tier detail shows the price equals to 3 TB multiplied by the Log Analytics effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.6 units of the commitment tier per day rate. Workspace C is the Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace that ingested 2 TB of data. Its commitment tier detail shows the price equals 2 TB multiplied by the Microsoft Sentinel effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.4 units of the commitment tier per day rate. In workspace billing mode, the primary difference is each portion of the ingested data is billed to the individual workspaces, and the unused 1 TB portion is billed to the cluster resource, but the grand total is the same (1.0 times the per day rate).  
+The table shows two scenarios where the three-workspace dedicated cluster is ingesting less data than the 5,000 GB per day commitment tier. In both scenarios, the first two workspaces, labeled A and B, aren't Microsoft Sentinel enabled. Workspace A and B ingested 1 TB of data separately, while the Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace C ingested 2 TB of data (a total of 4 TB). 
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+Since the commitment tier is 5TB, there's 1 TB of unused ingestion.
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+The first scenario uses cluster billing mode,  the second uses workspace billing mode. 
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+In cluster billing mode, the combined 2 TB of Log Analytics usage adds the extra 1 TB of unused usage and is billed to the cluster resource. The Commitment tier detail shows the price equals to 3 TB multiplied by the Log Analytics effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.6 units of the commitment tier per day rate. Workspace C is the Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace that ingested 2 TB of data. Its commitment tier detail shows the price equals 2 TB multiplied by the Microsoft Sentinel effective per GB (per day) price of the Commitment tier. The price is also expressed as 0.4 units of the commitment tier per day rate. 
 
+In workspace billing mode, each portion of the ingested data is billed to the individual workspaces, and the unused 1 TB portion is billed to the *cluster* resource. The total is the same as for cluster billing - 1.0 units of the commitment tier per day rate.
 
-Keep in mind, the simplified effective per GB price for a Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace now includes the log analytics ingestion cost. For more details on pricing, see the following articles: 
+Keep in mind, the simplified effective per-GB price for a Microsoft Sentinel enabled workspace now includes the log analytics ingestion cost. For more information on pricing, see the following articles: 
 - [Microsoft Sentinel pricing](https://azure.microsoft.com/pricing/details/microsoft-sentinel/)
 - [Azure Monitor pricing](https://azure.microsoft.com/pricing/details/monitor/).
 
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 - If one of the separate pricing tiers for Log Analytics or Microsoft Sentinel was inappropriately mismatched, the simplified pricing tier could result in cost saving.
 
 ### Is there ever a reason NOT to switch?
-It's possible your Microsoft account team negotiated a discounted price for Log Analytics or Microsoft Sentinel charges on the classic tiers. You can't tell if this is so from the Microsoft Sentinel pricing interface alone. It might be possible to calculate the expected cost vs. actual charge in Microsoft Cost Management to see if there's a discount included. In such cases, we recommend contacting your Microsoft account team if you want to switch to the simplified pricing tiers or have any questions.
+It's possible your Microsoft account team negotiated a discounted price for Log Analytics or Microsoft Sentinel charges on the classic tiers. You can't tell if this is so from the Microsoft Sentinel pricing interface alone. It might be possible to calculate the expected cost vs actual charge in Microsoft Cost Management to see if there's a discount included. In such cases, we recommend contacting your Microsoft account team if you want to switch to the simplified pricing tiers or have any questions.
 
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