edit pass: get-started-raw-media-access

Author: ShawnJackson

articles/communication-services/includes/public-preview-include-document.md

@@ -8,5 +8,5 @@ ms.custom: private_preview
 ---
 > [!IMPORTANT]
 > Functionality described in this document is currently in public preview.
-> This preview version is provided without a service-level agreement, and it's not recommended for production workloads. Certain features might not be supported or might have constrained capabilities. 
+> This preview version is provided without a service-level agreement, and we don't recommend it for production workloads. Certain features might not be supported or might have constrained capabilities.
 > For more information, see [Supplemental Terms of Use for Microsoft Azure Previews](https://azure.microsoft.com/support/legal/preview-supplemental-terms/).

articles/communication-services/quickstarts/voice-video-calling/includes/raw-media/raw-media-access-android.md

@@ -248,7 +248,7 @@ Because the Android system generates the frames, you must implement your own for
     screenShareRawOutgoingVideoStream = new ScreenShareRawOutgoingVideoStream(rawOutgoingVideoStreamOptions);
     ```
 
-3. Request needed permissions for screen capture on Android. After this method is called, Android will automatically call `onActivityResult,` which contains the request code that you sent and the result of the operation.
+3. Request needed permissions for screen capture on Android. After this method is called, Android will automatically call `onActivityResult`, which contains the request code that you sent and the result of the operation.
 
    Expect `Activity.RESULT_OK` if the user has provided the permission. If so, attach `screenShareRawOutgoingVideoStream` to the call and start your own foreground service to capture the frames.
 

articles/communication-services/quickstarts/voice-video-calling/includes/raw-media/raw-media-access-ios.md

@@ -297,7 +297,7 @@ The app must register a delegate to get notified about when it should start or s
 
        func rawOutgoingVideoStreamOptions(_ rawOutgoingVideoStreamOptions: RawOutgoingVideoStreamOptions,
                                           didChangeVideoFrameSender args: VideoFrameSenderChangedEventArgs) {
-           // Sender can change to start sending a more efficient format(given network conditions) of the ones specified 
+           // Sender can change to start sending a more efficient format (given network conditions) of the ones specified 
            // in the list on the initial step. In that case, you should restart the sender.
            if running {
                stopRunning()

articles/communication-services/quickstarts/voice-video-calling/includes/raw-media/raw-media-access-windows.md

@@ -235,7 +235,7 @@ Because the Windows system generates the frames, you must implement your own for
 2. Capture the frames from the screen by using Windows APIs.
 
     ```csharp
-    MemoryBuffer memoryBuffer = // Fill it with the content you got from the Windows API's
+    MemoryBuffer memoryBuffer = // Fill it with the content you got from the Windows APIs
     ```
 
 3. Send the video frames in the following way.