AB#380008 - Minor edits from module review

Author: ShawnKupfer

learn-pr/azure/intro-cloud-everyone/includes/1-introduction.md

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+In this module, you'll learn how programs like Cloud for Everyone help empower organizations with a focus on every person in their role as part of a community. 
 
-Learn how programs like Cloud for Everyone will help empower organizations with a focus on every person, in their role, as part of a community. 
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-In this module, you'll learn about the Cloud for Everyone foundational principles that focus on providing access to the power of cloud technologies, with the goal of enabling everyone to thrive.
+You'll also learn about the Cloud for Everyone foundational principles that focus on providing access to the power of cloud technologies, with the goal of enabling everyone to thrive.
 
 By the end of this module, you'll understand how Cloud for Everyone is Microsoft's unique approach to guiding inclusivity in product design (engineering) and marketing across all cloud products and platforms.
 

learn-pr/azure/intro-cloud-everyone/includes/2-diversity-inclusion.md

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 These are the thoughts of Kathleen Hall, Microsoft CVP of Global Advertising and Research. It's a statement that beautifully captures Microsoft's focus on cultural transformation. We fundamentally believe that we need a culture founded in a growth mindset. This culture starts with the belief that everyone can grow and develop; that potential is nurtured, not predetermined; and that anyone can change their viewpoint.
 
-We always need to learn and be insatiably curious to help understand our customers. Our willingness to lean into uncertainty, take risks, and quickly learn from mistakes, teaches us that failure happens along the way to mastery. And we need to be open to the ideas of others, where their success doesn't diminish our own. We strive to harness the power in having a diverse and inclusive workplace that can build across all Microsoft resources, for the benefit of our clients. This way of thinking genuinely helps us make a difference together, and provides a return on purpose.
+We always need to learn and be insatiably curious to help understand our customers. Our willingness to lean into uncertainty, take risks, and quickly learn from mistakes teaches us that failure happens along the way to mastery. We also need to be open to the ideas of others, where their success doesn't diminish our own. We strive to harness the power in having a diverse and inclusive workplace that can build across all Microsoft resources for the benefit of our clients. This way of thinking genuinely helps us make a difference together, and provides a return on purpose.
 
 If we step back and observe the exponential growth and changes occurring around the world, we begin to recognize that technology and connectivity are removing borders and boundaries. Globalization and the flow of information allow us to share ideas and communicate easier, which brings a broad array of perspectives and insights.
 
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 - By 2044, there will be no clear ethnicity in the world.
 - There are more than 1 billion people in the world with a disability, which makes them approximately 14% of the global population.
-    - Only 10% of people with disabilities have access to the products and services they need.
-    - When you include family and close friends of people with disabilities, this market reaches an additional 2.3 billion people who collectively control an incremental $6.9 trillion in annual disposable income.
+  - Only 10% of people with disabilities have access to the products and services they need.
+  - When you include family and close friends of people with disabilities, this market reaches an additional 2.3 billion people, who collectively control an incremental $6.9 trillion in annual disposable income.
 - In the US, the millennial population has surpassed the baby boomer figure and is the first generation to grow up surrounded by technology.  
 - In 2017, 40% of the US workforce was made up of the millennial and Gen Z population.
 - The estimated buying power of all LGBTQI+ is $3.6 trillion.
 - 80% of buying decisions are made by women, with global female buying power at $40 trillion.
 
-Diversity alone, without inclusivity, doesn't bring opportunity. Inclusivity and empathy are needed to bring about the true change that can lead to more significant and equitable benefits for all.
+Diversity alone, without inclusivity, doesn't bring opportunity. We need inclusivity and empathy to bring about the true change that can lead to more significant and equitable benefits for all.
 
 Microsoft's commitment to D&I says that, "Only by actively engaging different perspectives can we challenge and stretch our thinking, enrich the experience of our employees, and empower every person and every organization on the planet to achieve more."
 
-We want to see every person and every community grow, innovate, and thrive.
-Our company mission isn't just a guiding principle; it's part of our DNA. We stand for every person and every organization. To bring the power of technology to everyone, we must understand what "everyone" really means. This pledge requires us to seek and find any community or group of people that lacks access or opportunity, particularly the hidden ones.
+We want to see every person and every community grow, innovate, and thrive. Our company mission isn't just a guiding principle; it's part of our DNA. We stand for every person and every organization. To bring the power of technology to everyone, we must understand what "everyone" really means. This pledge requires us to seek and find any community or group of people that lacks access or opportunity, particularly the hidden ones.
 
 This means:
 
 - Listening more than having all the answers.
-- A commitment to dive deeper, to not just understand the barriers and challenges that exist today, but to examine why they're there, and then commit to removing them.
+- A commitment to dive deeper, to not just understand the barriers and challenges that exist today, but to examine why they're there, then commit to removing them.
 - Committing to being inclusive in all aspects of what we do, how we show up, and the technologies we build.
-- Caring about every person as an individual, in their role, as part of a community.
+- Caring about every person as an individual in their role as part of a community.
 - Focusing on partnering with others so that they can be great, not concentrating on greatness for ourselves.
 
 ## What we need to do
 
 Good ideas, beliefs, and technologies aren't enough. Good intentions must be converted into tangible actions to enable the builders of the future to create great things for themselves and their communities. These actions need to be persistent and enduring to drive meaningful impact. We have to commit to a long-term journey.
 
-Across Microsoft, we have teams who are bringing this mission to life by defining and weaving the principles of D&I into the unique areas of their business, whether it's applied in gaming, AI or the cloud. Creating an inclusive culture is the cornerstone for all teams and how they accomplish great things. While this process starts with our focus on diversity in our hiring and inclusiveness in our work environment, it doesn't stop there.  We need to incorporate areas like inclusive design, with a focus on creating great products for the largest number of people. Also, Inclusive Marketing strives to reflect human values, allowing each individual to see themselves in relation to the product, service, or experience.
+Across Microsoft, we have teams who are bringing this mission to life by defining and weaving the principles of D&I into the unique areas of their business, whether it's applied in gaming, AI, or the cloud. Creating an inclusive culture is the cornerstone for all teams and how they accomplish great things. While this process starts with our focus on diversity in our hiring and inclusiveness in our work environment, it doesn't stop there. We need to incorporate areas like inclusive design, with a focus on creating great products for the largest number of people. Also, Inclusive Marketing strives to reflect human values, allowing each individual to see themselves in relation to the product, service, or experience.
 
-It's our belief that some people might know what they want to do, but they don't know how. Others may not even realize what's possible. Providing access to the power of cloud technologies that enable everyone to thrive is our goal, and represents true equity. Only when that happens will we live up to our stated mission.
+It's our belief that some people might know what they want to do, but they don't know how. Others might not even realize what's possible. Providing access to the power of cloud technologies that enable everyone to thrive is our goal, and represents true equity. Only when that happens will we live up to our stated mission.

learn-pr/azure/intro-cloud-everyone/includes/3-inclusive-culture.md

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 ## Inclusive culture
 
-Before we can create an inclusive culture, we need to understand the concept of unconscious or implicit bias. Neuroscience shows that our brains process and organize endless amounts of information. Conscious processing is estimated at around 40 pieces of information per second. In stark comparison, approximately 11 million points of information can be categorized and formatted by the brain without awareness.
+Before we can create an inclusive culture, we need to understand the concept of unconscious or implicit bias. Neuroscience shows that our brains process and organize endless amounts of information. Conscious processing is estimated at around 40 pieces of information per second. In stark comparison, the brain can categorize and format approximately 11 million points of information without awareness.
 
 ### What is unconscious bias?
 
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 Unconscious bias creates many problems. Businesses can be impacted by inadvertently creating embarrassing situations that might alienate customers or lead to costly mistakes. Inside companies, unintentionally overlooking different inputs can occur without conscious awareness. In this scenario, a request is made for immediate contribution during a team meeting to guide the next project steps. There's pressure to respond immediately, which might only be comfortable for specific individuals in the room. If someone needs more time to formulate a thoughtful response to an inquiry, impactful feedback could be missed.
 
-The first step to reducing and eliminating this challenge is to learn about the different forms of unconscious bias. This step provides the opportunity to reflect on, and gain awareness of, our own bias. With this information in hand, the next step is to look outward, to the business. Seek areas where your organization might be influenced by bias, then take steps to remove those challenges. 
+The first step to reducing and eliminating this challenge is to learn about the different forms of unconscious bias. This step provides the opportunity to reflect on, and gain awareness of, our own bias. With this information in hand, the next step is to look outward to the business. Seek areas where your organization might be influenced by bias, then take steps to remove those challenges.
 
 ### Tools to address unconscious bias
 
-There are many tools to use and approaches to take to recognize and remove unconscious bias. Then there will be space for inclusivity to grow and flourish. For instance, we might use data to help inform and guide toward creating a more heterogeneous environment. Becoming curious about your internal processes and structures supports gaining new insights. By employing inclusive behaviors, each individual can make a difference in the workplace. Ask questions, listen, and seek to understand, instead of making assumptions. Ensure all voices are heard and attempt to address misunderstandings and resolve disagreements. Seek input from people with varied backgrounds and try to understand individuals' contributions. 
+There are many tools to use and approaches to take to recognize and remove unconscious bias. Then there will be space for inclusivity to grow and flourish. For instance, we might use data to help inform and guide toward creating a more heterogeneous environment. Becoming curious about your internal processes and structures supports gaining new insights. By employing inclusive behaviors, each individual can make a difference in the workplace. Ask questions, listen, and seek to understand instead of making assumptions. Ensure all voices are heard and attempt to address misunderstandings and resolve disagreements. Seek input from people with varied backgrounds and try to understand individuals' contributions.
 
 Though this approach might feel uncomfortable and awkward at times, be brave, and rest assured that the results are unmistakable.
-Creating an inclusive culture invites a dialog of constant curiosity where learning and adapting can foster an environment in which all employees feel more supported and empowered to contribute their own diverse experiences and perspectives. The result is an organization whose individuals are much more thoughtful about each other, and they're encouraged to innovate.
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+Creating an inclusive culture invites a dialog of constant curiosity where learning and adapting can foster an environment in which all employees feel more supported and empowered to contribute their own diverse experiences and perspectives. The result is an organization whose individuals are much more thoughtful about each other and encouraged to innovate.