Roz's tweaks to Mat's writing

Author: Demotive

app/posts/personalised-prevention-platform/2025/03/2025-03-12-post.md

@@ -102,14 +102,14 @@ We also used a series of design probes to begin to understand ways in which we c
 Alongside the user research, we wanted to understand the complexity of the service landscape in which a prevention platform might sit, and find out which approaches we could take to best support users.
 
 To this end we explored:
--	starting points, motivations and triggers for preventative user journeys within and without the NHS
+-	starting points and motivations for preventative user journeys within and without the NHS
 -	the broad range of services that would potentially need to be collated to create personalised recommendations – their creation, provision, and how discoverable they may be
--	how the NHS currently “does prevention recommendation” via the lens of social prescribing
--	potential sources of structured information about people (i.e. users) and services, and applicable standards
--	broad concepts of how a platform might do work to recommend the most appropriate preventative services to users
+-	how the NHS currently “does prevention recommendation” through the lens of social prescribing
+-	potential sources of structured information about users and services, and applicable standards
+-	broad concepts of how a platform might recommend the most appropriate preventative services to users
 
 [fig and caption:]
-Visual artefact examining the landscape using high level journey stages from trigger point to choosing and using a preventative service.
+Visual artefact examining the landscape using high level journey stages from people deciding or being prompted to act to choosing and using a preventative service.
 (link to PDF – here's a Sharepoint of it)
 
 ### Technical landscape