Updates from reviews

Author: jpipkin1

blog-cse/2024-11-08-application-update.md

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 ### Cloud SIEM network sensor end-of-life
 
-The Sumo Logic Product Team is discontinuing our on-premise network sensor feature for Sumo Logic Cloud SIEM. The feature will no longer receive updates as of 8 November 2024, and support ends as of 31 January 2025. We fully support a customer or partner managed [Zeek network sensor](/docs/cse/sensors/ingest-zeek-logs/) as a data source for our Cloud SIEM product that will provide equivalent monitoring of your network.
+The Sumo Logic Product Team is discontinuing our on-premise network sensor feature for Sumo Logic Cloud SIEM. The feature will no longer receive updates as of November 8, 2024, and support ends as of January 31, 2025. We fully support a customer or partner managed [Zeek network sensor](/docs/cse/sensors/ingest-zeek-logs/) as a data source for our Cloud SIEM product that will provide equivalent monitoring of your network.
 
 Learn more [here](/docs/cse/sensors/network-sensor-end-of-life/).

docs/cse/sensors/network-sensor-end-of-life.md

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-At Sumo Logic, we pride ourselves on being a leading SaaS log analytics company for observability and security solutions. Our strategic focus centers on delivering cloud-based solutions, as we firmly believe that SaaS represents the most effective means to deliver substantial value and a seamless experience to our customer base.
+At Sumo Logic, we pride ourselves on being a leading SaaS log analytics company that helps make the digital world faster, more reliable, and more secure by unifying insights to ignite action through the power of logs.
 
-The Sumo Logic Product Team is discontinuing our on-premise network sensor feature for Sumo Logic Cloud SIEM. This end-of-life notification for Sumo Logic's network sensor means the feature will no longer receive support or updates based on the timelines listed below. We believe this to be the best course of action to keep our development focus on delivering world class detection and response capabilities.
+We’re always looking at ways to innovate, drive more value, and provide a seamless experience for our customers. In this vein we are discontinuing our on-premise network sensor feature for Sumo Logic Cloud SIEM. This end-of-life notification for Sumo Logic's network sensor means the feature will no longer receive support or updates based on the timelines listed below. We believe this to be the best course of action to keep our development focus on delivering world class detection and response capabilities.
 
 We fully recognize that this decision may have implications for your business operations, and we are committed to planning with you and your security team to minimize disruptions. We fully support a customer or partner managed [Zeek network sensor](/docs/cse/sensors/ingest-zeek-logs/) as a data source for our Cloud SIEM product that will provide equivalent monitoring of your network.