final edits from Josh comments

Author: deadlypants1973

src/content/docs/cloudflare-one/insights/dex/monitoring.mdx

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-Monitor your organization's [fleet status](/cloudflare-one/insights/dex/monitoring/#fleet-status) as well as performance and network status for individual [user devices](/cloudflare-one/insights/dex/monitoring/#device-monitoring).
+Monitor performance and network status for your organization's [fleet](/cloudflare-one/insights/dex/monitoring/#fleet-status) or individual [user devices](/cloudflare-one/insights/dex/monitoring/#device-monitoring).
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+Network and device performance data helps IT administrators troubleshoot performance issues, investigate network connectivity problems, and monitor device health.
 
 ## Fleet status
 
 A fleet is a collection of user devices. All devices in a fleet have WARP installed and are connected to a [Cloudflare Zero Trust organization](/cloudflare-one/setup/#create-a-zero-trust-organization).
 
-To view fleet status and an overview of all enrolled devices:
+To view fleet status:
 
 1. In [Zero Trust](https://one.dash.cloudflare.com/), go to **DEX** > **Monitoring**.
 2. In **DEX Monitoring**, review the information under the **Fleet Status** tab.
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 Review network and device performance for a device enrolled in your fleet.
 
-Network and device performance data helps IT administrators to troubleshoot performance issues, investigate network connectivity problems, and monitor device health.
-
 ### View a device's performance
 
 To view a device's network and device performance metrics:
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 - **Unique networks over time**: How many unique SSIDs the device was connected to.
 
-- **Network I/O**: How much data has been transferred (uploads and downloads) between the device and the network.
+- **Network I/O**: How much data has been transferred (uploads and downloads) over the primary network interface.
 
 #### Device performance metrics
 
-- **Battery percentage and cycles**: Compares battery percentage to battery health over time. Used to debug potential performance issues possibly related to power-saving measures that are triggered at low-battery levels.
+- **Battery percentage and cycles**: Displays battery percentage and [battery cycles](https://support.apple.com/en-us/102888) over time. Used to debug potential performance issues possibly related to battery health or power-saving measures that are triggered at low-battery levels.
 
 - **CPU usage**: CPU utilization over time. Used to debug slow system performance due to high CPU usage.
 
 - **Memory utilization**: Memory utilization over time. Used to debug performance issues related to an overtaxed memory.
 
-- **Disk I/O**: Displays number of disk bytes read/write operations over time. Used to debug performance errors due to heavy disk operations.
+- **Disk I/O**: Displays number of disk read/write operations over time. Used to debug performance errors due to heavy disk operations.