Update 4438 to cover NB US 220-344

Author: jwakely

xml/issue4438.xml

@@ -9,6 +9,7 @@
 <priority>99</priority>
 
 <discussion>
+<b>Addresses <a href="https://github.com/cplusplus/nbballot/issues/919">US 220-344</a></b>
 <p>
 <sref ref="[exec.when.all]"/> p5 reads as follows:
 </p>
@@ -44,6 +45,8 @@ satisfies <tt><i>forwarding-query</i></tt>, `e.query(q)` is expression-equivalen
 The problem is with "<tt>state.<i>stop-src</i>.get_token()</tt>" in bullet (5.2). There is no `state` 
 object here. This expression should be `stop_src.get_token()`.
 </p>
+
+<note>Kona 2025-11-05; add edits to address NB comment.</note>
 </discussion>
 
 <resolution>
@@ -63,13 +66,14 @@ This wording is relative to <paper num="N5014"/>.
 <pre>
 template&lt;class Env&gt;
   constexpr auto <i>make-when-all-env</i>(inplace_stop_source&amp; stop_src,        <i>// exposition only</i>
-                                   Env&amp;&amp; env) noexcept {
+                                   Env&amp;&amp; env) noexcept<ins>;</ins><del> {
   return <i>see below</i>;
-}
+}</del>
 </pre>
 </blockquote>
 <p>
-Returns an object `e` such that
+<ins><i>Returns</i>:</ins>
+<del>Returns</del> an object `e` such that
 </p>
 <ul style="list-style-type: none">
 <li>(5.1) &mdash; `decltype(e)` models <tt><i>queryable</i></tt>, and
@@ -78,7 +82,7 @@ Returns an object `e` such that
 and
 </li>
 <li>(5.3) &mdash; given a query object `q` with type other than <i>cv</i> `stop_token_t` and whose type 
-satisfies <tt><i>forwarding-query</i></tt>, `e.query(q)` is expression-equivalent to `get_env(rcvr).query(q)`.
+satisfies <tt><i>forwarding-query</i></tt>, `e.query(q)` is expression-equivalent to <del>`get_env(rcvr)`</del><ins>`env`</ins>`.query(q)`.
 </li>
 </ul>
 </blockquote>