Trim Try intro

Author: palewire

try.html

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 permalink: /try
 
 intro: |
-    Jupyter builds tools, standards, and services for many different usecases. This page
-    has links to interactive demos that allow you to try some of these tools for free online.
-    These use <a href="https://mybinder.org">mybinder.org</a>, a free public service that the Jupyter
-    team runs for the community.
+    Project Jupyter builds tools, standards, and services for many different use cases. This page
+    has links to interactive demos that allow you to try some our tools for free online, thanks to
+    <a href="https://mybinder.org">mybinder.org</a>, a free public service provided by the Jupyter community.
 
 applications_copy: |
     The Jupyter team builds several end-user applications that facilitate interactive computing workflows.