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docs/analytics/cloud.mdx

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 # Sourcegraph Cloud Analytics
 
-The following instructions are for all Sourcegraph Cloud customers, and self-hosted customers who have upgraded to a sufficient version of Sourcegraph (5.9+) and have fully enabled usage telemetry. Customers that self-host can also view our [self-hosted analytics enablement](./self-hosted).
+The following instructions are for all Sourcegraph Cloud and self-hosted customers who have upgraded to a sufficient version of Sourcegraph (5.9+) and fully enabled telemetry usage. Customers that self-host can also view our [self-hosted analytics enablement](/self-hosted).
 
 ![Sourcegraph-cloud-analytics](https://storage.googleapis.com/sourcegraph-assets/cloud-analytics.png)
 
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 To enable Sourcegraph Analytics:
 
 - Create an account on [Sourcegraph Accounts](https://accounts.sourcegraph.com/), or find the email address associated with your existing account.
-- Get in touch with your Sourcegraph Technical Advisor or point of contact (or email us at [email protected] if you don't know your contact), provide them with the email address you used to register above, and ask for access to Sourcegraph Analytics.
+- Contact your Sourcegraph Technical Advisor or point of contact (or email us at [email protected] if you don't know your contact), provide them with the email address you used to register above and ask for access to Sourcegraph Analytics.
 - They will validate your account and link it to your Sourcegraph Enterprise instance's usage metrics.
 - Sign in to [Sourcegraph Analytics](https://cody-analytics.sourcegraph.com).
 
 ## Data export
 
-Sourcegraph Cloud Analytics also includes a CSV export option with key metrics like number of searches, chats, autocomplete suggestions, completion acceptance rate (CAR %), and more. The data is split by user, day, client/editor, and programming language; perfect for automating retrieval and analyzing data in ways that make the most sense to your organization.
+Sourcegraph Cloud Analytics also includes a CSV export option with key metrics like the number of searches, chats, autocomplete suggestions, completion acceptance rate (CAR %), and more. The data is split by user, day, client/editor, and programming language, perfect for automating retrieval and analyzing data in ways that make the most sense to your organization.